Hello, my name is Hitomi H. I live in Kumamoto in Japan. I am a university student who goes to university in Kumamoto. I am majoring in English. I am a freshman. I study English every day, and I sometimes study French.
The English class is very interesting every day. I get new knowledge in English class and exploit it in the next English class. My knowledge of English grows every day. The more I understand, the more I like English. On the other hard, French is very difficult. It is very difficult for me. It takes time for me to understand French.
I am spending my campus life usefully and cheerfully. I enjoy taking with my friends in school life and I go to play with club members after school. I am satisfied with my life. There are international students at my university. We have the same class once in a while. We speak in English. We speak about the culture of our home country and tell about our favorites.
I heard about the charm of Australia from an international student in Australia. I was originally interested in Australia but I was interested in Australia after that. I am very glad to go to study abroad this time in Australia. Australia is a great place. I want to see famous kangaroos and koalas. They are very cute. I will be able to do various experiences. I am looking forward to spending a good time with you.
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Hi Hitomi,
返信削除This essay introducing yourself to a host family is almost as long as the draft Mr. T asked you to write prior to entering Writing III (250 words), but there must be something more you could add about yourself , that is, apart from school and extra-curricular activities, that will be of interest to a host family. For example, do you come from a large or small family in Kumamoto? How long has your family been in Kumamoto?
You should add that kind of information to a separate, revised essay post, due April 17, labeled "essays, revisions" (separated by a comma, without quotation marks). Then please add the label "drafts" (again comma separated from "essays") to this draft essay post (1-01a).
This draft essay also has four virtually distinct paragraphs. To make those paragraphs even more distinct, in the second, revised version (1-01b), you should enter an extra line return between each pair of them, to create white spaces between the paragraphs. However, please add the extra content that I've suggested above first, before you decide where the revised paragraph divisions should be.
Cheers.